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(YouTube)   Farker MyNameIsMofuga's Funniest Person in Austin 2014 set. Tag is for not advancing to the next round   (youtube.com) divider line 13
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2014-04-03 01:27:57 PM  
Your delivery could use some work but I loved your material.

Dark stuff.  Probably a little too dark for a harhar contest but it's right up my alley.  I definitely wouldn't biatch about the three drink minimum if you were bringing that to the mic.
 
2014-04-03 01:38:59 PM  
Only other crit is that for such a short set I think you could have benefited from a more focused routine topic-wise.  I would have liked to have heard more about the military myself but any one of those gags could have been fleshed out so that the segues were so jarring.

Sorry to be so presumptuous as to act like Professor Comedy PhD, again I thought it was strong material.
 
2014-04-03 01:52:09 PM  
I agree with the other commenter but would advise you in a different direction delivery wise.   You start with creepy jokes.  Slow down.  Slow way down.  Turn your back to the audience.  Be creepy.  Be uncomfortable.  Be Steven Wright with creepy jokes. You're not going to pull off high energy, so go the opposite direction.

The no legs twelve step needs to be followed with "you guys walked right into that one... he can't."

Also - the clown shortage.  You should introduce it this way - "they say there's a shortage of clowns in the US.  I tend to see it as an excess of child molesters, but I'm a glass hall full type of guy."

the Korean joke needs an out with "I just assumed this was already the law... in every Asian country... and parts of LA."

Your irony bit needs a "I look to Alanis for guidance on this"
 
2014-04-03 02:40:02 PM  
Sorry to do a "me too"... but I agree that you should try to build on one or two themes for a set that short.  Give it some flow.
 
2014-04-03 03:52:57 PM  
I enjoyed that.
 
2014-04-03 04:06:31 PM  
Just curious, how long did that 6 minutes feel like?

/keep going up there
 
2014-04-04 03:29:25 AM  
I was thinking Stephen Wright as well, which is good.

"Couldn't tell when the Opera is over". That's the punch line. Don't tell them "because they were all fat". Less is more, respect your audience.

"You're not going to believe this" -- Not any more we're not. You just pulled me right out of my suspension of disbelief.

"Texas is getting so desperate" is a Johnny Carson cliche. Unless you're Carson, don't do that.

I don't think the Dora the Explorer joke worked at all.

And when you ended, I thought you were pretty good, and the D&D joke pretty good too, but I wouldn't have ended saying "... I didn't get laid a lot in High School." You already said that multiple times and it was just sort of a downer. (Call me sensitive about that too.)

So I thought you were good, and should keep doing it, and echo the thought that you might want to find a common thread to work your set around.
 
2014-04-04 10:22:06 AM  
The material is up my alley and I liked it a lot but your character appeal is empty. In that sense I liked it but you would never be able to draw a laugh from me when presenting like this.

On a side note: I don't know if this holds true for your average American but as a vet I can't stand it when others, especially in talent competitions, open their line of communication by defining themselves as a vet.

Also I wouldn't call this a fail, I would never be able to do what you did without turning into a nervous wreck. If this is what you want to do learn from what others say about you and come back stronger. :)
 
2014-04-04 11:48:25 AM  
OK. I was laughing quite a bit.

MyNameIsMofuga  -- Your creativity and wit are terrific. I would only suggest that you work more on your delivery, your rhythm. To me, you still look a bit shy and a bit awkward, as though you have some stage fright. But, dammit, you really are funny and that's what counts.

Is it wrong for me to still be laughing at the legless alkie who can't do the 12-step program?
 
2014-04-04 08:31:29 PM  
I really appreciate all of the kind words and the constructive criticism.  I really feel like my writing has gotten a lot better since I started and I agree with you guys that I really need to work on my stage presence.  I am an extreme introvert for the most part so I am not sure if I'll ever be comfortable up there. I need to teach myself how to fake it.  

I agree with you guys that I probably would have been better off with a more cohesive focused type set.  I think I stuck with one liners because that is what I have been doing at open mics recently and a lot of times the freshest material seems the best to perform.  I am preparing for a smaller contest in Waco this summer and am already working a solid bit based on one or two themes.  

Crewmannumber6-  Six minutes is a good amount of time.  Most open mics in the area are only four minutes long.  So the extra couple of minutes can really help a set.  The only bad part is with the open mics only being four minutes long you have to split up your set when practicing at a mic.  The best part about the contest is performing in the big room with a huge crowd who are there to have a good time. 

Tenetra-  That was actually the only time I've ever done any jokes about being a vet.  I thought it would be memorable to bust the judges balls a little at the beginning.  I still would like to do some jokes about Iraq or the military in general but I doubt I will ever do a "Hey, guys I'm a veteran bit again."  for the reasons you mentioned. 

Comedy is a lot of fun even with the extreme nervousness and I am glad I can make people laugh. Austin is a good scene with some good caring comics.  I think I am in a good place to get better.   I also think being a long time Farker has helped my sense of snark.  Thanks again guys!
 
2014-04-04 08:43:58 PM  
Since I am not a vet, I just find it funny how dudes who've been in combat can be "afraid" of standing up in front of a room of other people. I think that says something about the power of speech and the power of reputations and ego.
 
2014-04-04 08:46:01 PM  

MyNameIsMofuga: I really appreciate all of the kind words and the constructive criticism.  I really feel like my writing has gotten a lot better since I started and I agree with you guys that I really need to work on my stage presence.  I am an extreme introvert for the most part so I am not sure if I'll ever be comfortable up there. I need to teach myself how to fake it.  

I agree with you guys that I probably would have been better off with a more cohesive focused type set.  I think I stuck with one liners because that is what I have been doing at open mics recently and a lot of times the freshest material seems the best to perform.  I am preparing for a smaller contest in Waco this summer and am already working a solid bit based on one or two themes.  

Crewmannumber6-  Six minutes is a good amount of time.  Most open mics in the area are only four minutes long.  So the extra couple of minutes can really help a set.  The only bad part is with the open mics only being four minutes long you have to split up your set when practicing at a mic.  The best part about the contest is performing in the big room with a huge crowd who are there to have a good time. 

Tenetra-  That was actually the only time I've ever done any jokes about being a vet.  I thought it would be memorable to bust the judges balls a little at the beginning.  I still would like to do some jokes about Iraq or the military in general but I doubt I will ever do a "Hey, guys I'm a veteran bit again."  for the reasons you mentioned. 

Comedy is a lot of fun even with the extreme nervousness and I am glad I can make people laugh. Austin is a good scene with some good caring comics.  I think I am in a good place to get better.   I also think being a long time Farker has helped my sense of snark.  Thanks again guys!


You do have talent, you're damn good, kiddo. Listen, working on stage presence is totally achievable with a good coach. A good coach cannot teach authentic humor/point of view that you obviously have.

Best of luck. As you continue, I'd love to see more, laugh a lot!
 
2014-04-04 08:51:39 PM  
I have to agree with everyone else. Your material is great, but a weak delivery from a vet doesn't work - especially if you do the edgy stuff.  I'd vote for a more assertive stage presence.  Think Rodney Dangerfield.
 
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